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    dots Submission Name: Thunderstorm.dots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThunderstorm.dots
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    Dark clouds fill this void of emptiness inside of me
    And it all comes pouring heavily down
    Drowning my every dream of becoming who I'd like to be
    This is who I am when you're not around

    I twitch as the lightning explodes in my heart
    Zapping away what I so ignorantly thought was real
    The thunder rolls in my head and again I start
    Depending on the promises you made that were never sealed

    The storm lets up for a short time and I can finally rest
    The rain washed away my every memory of you
    But why do I still hold such anger in my chest?
    What is it about tonight thats making me this confused?

    From the window I stare up at the black and purple skies
    I'm all alone, but I know not anymore of what to do
    As the final ligtening bolt glows my dark room, I slowly realize
    It's the anger of the storm that makes me think of you.




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 16:54:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great write awesome read. i really hope to read more by you soon. keep posting. you're doing great






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    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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