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Aisu (Ice)


Author: DrunkOnShadows
ASL Info:    16/F/Ont
Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 66 /84 /49
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Inspired by events that happen all too frequently.


Aisu (Ice)



Visibly upset
But silent as ever
She showed emotions never
Frowning
She let out a sigh
And purposefully caught my eye

"Speak to me,
I just don't get it,"
Why are you so apathetic?
Indifferent
"I want to understand"
As I take her freezing hand

"It doesn't matter,
You shouldn't care"
And she hung her short brown hair
Pulling away
The tears wanted to flow
But she didn't want emotion to show

My heart breaks
"You don't seem to see,
How much your pain hurts me,"
I take a breath...
That was long overdue
"I hope you know I love you."

Looking up
With her rogue grace
Eyes like ice in her face
Her tears began
Like spring's first fallen rain
"I hope you know I'll never feel the same..."




Submitted on 2007-04-24 18:57:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  the poem speaks volumes. It comes across as a silent moment, as though more was being said through the silence. I've been in that relationship, the one sided love thing. Thats how it feels, Like your heart is sliding on ice and no one knows if someone is going to catch it.
Either way, It sings the saddest song.

The words were moving, and spread themselves slowly in my minds space. Like ripples in a pond.
Ex: "It doesn't matter,
You shouldn't care"
And she hung her short brown hair
Pulling away
The tears wanted to flow
But she didn't want emotion to show"

TO me that played slowly, as to feel the agony.
The isolation. I've been that girl. I've hung my head, many times....



| Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by butterfly wings | [ Reply to This ]
  This is incredibly sad. I read it because of the title. Aisu is the name of the Water goddess in my story (from 'Aysu', Turkish for moon water), who also governs sorrow and suffering. I wasn't surprised to see the incorporation of the name into something this cold. The ending line summed up the feeling of the whole thing, distance and one-sided love.
| Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]


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