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    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    Her mind remembering his laughter and smile
    She had not heard from him in quite awhile
    Those words in his poems written just for her
    Touching her, the feelings now just a blur
    What could have been if she only hung on
    To a hope that soon she would not be alone
    But the distance that would separate them
    Caused her hopes to fade and then go dim
    With all the miles that kept them both apart
    The distance was only breaking her heart
    Letting him go she thought was for the best
    Maybe those long night she could finally rest
    Days, weeks, months went by and yet still
    Her loneliness and longing for him was real
    Could she ever get back the love she lost
    Was she willing to try whatever the cost
    Questions going over and over in her mind
    Will her efforts she makes for him be in time
    To draw him back into her life and heart
    Determined with him to make a fresh start
    Will the man she loved so very much
    Once more long for her, to feel her touch




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 20:14:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aaaaaah, Love! So much like a cat! When we seek it's company, it becomes shy and elusive. But, when we busy ouselves otherwise, it comes up and rubs against our leg!

    This is a lovely poem Linda! Longing and remorse; aren't they ever such a part of the love story!
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Linda,

    It has been a while since I have commented and longer since we have talked.

    Glad to see you back and it is nice to be back.

    This seems to be a sad one for me because I can relate to it. I hope all is well with you on this subject but it is and always will be the way life hands you the ups and downs.
    I find myself hoping that you are writing this for someone else because it would break my heart to know that this is your story.
    Love is fickle in that it there is no predicting the outcome. We can nuture it but there has to be a mutual strong love in returned.
    I hope that this comment finds you well these day and if I got it wrong then I am sorry.

    Take care and I hope that happiness always finds it way to your heart.

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      oh to love, lose, and then spend eternity trying to recapture.

    I do think you wrote a very pretty story on the subject. There is one line out of th entire thing that has missed a beat.
    "Could she ever get back the love she lost"
    Maybe an added word might help the flow.

    I really enjoyed the story.

    good write.
    | Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Linda, these are lovely words that you write. Longing for what might have been is something that we all relate to. Many of us, as we live our lives, often wonder of what might have been.

    However, it is important that we do no wollow and lose ourselves in the past, or the 'what might have been syndrome'.

    A lovely write from you and welcome back.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Well hello & Happy Day Girl! I wondered what had happened to you & to your sis - I hope all is well and you will let me know

    This is a very emotional piece and full of longing and perhaps, regret. Love and loneliness sometimes seem to go hand-in-hand don't they! This just struck a cord with me and sometimes, in general, with love, you never can tell - it's not so easy but "IT" is well worth!

    Never lose faith - Love does prevail

    I hope all is well and again, hello to you and hello to Sandra

    Love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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