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    dots Submission Name: just a boredots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Lyrics/You left me
    Total Views: 533
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    Bytes: 1094



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       just in case i need somehting else to think about.


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    dotsjust a boredots
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    i used to be free
    you used to believe in me
    you used to be with me
    you used to worship me
    you used to be on your knee
    now its only you
    you think im not true
    you wont leave me feeling blue
    but i'll give you one last clue
    heres what i want you to do
    leave and dont come back
    cuz you hurt me and now you lack
    you think its class
    but you just got tack
    dont ever come back
    dont cross my path
    dont share my bath
    not again
    its the end
    you're not my friend
    my hearts nopt out for lend
    i wont bend
    i wont pretend
    this message i send
    wont blend
    im not in the crowd
    i wont be loud
    i wont make a sound
    when you pass
    you wont last
    im too fast
    you're only part of the past
    now
    and i wont allow
    you to bow
    at my feet anymore
    cuz im not just another whore
    crying at your door
    i cant take no more
    you're just a bore




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 20:18:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this a whole lot. Sometimes its just too late, and it hurts too much to allow the people that hurt you back into your life. Anyway, good write.
    | Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by onexlifex1chanc | [ Reply to This ]
      Just as I've told you before, don't count on men or even others to appreciate you as much as you do yourself - I know you are a person and a woman deserving of love and never settle!

    THis was like a quick rap and flowed well, but more so for the meaning.

    Keep your chin and your esteem up girl!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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