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Nothing Beats Marshmellows


Author: WaxingPoetic
ASL Info:    27 ~ Louisiana
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 493 /563 /100
Words: 53
Class/Type: Lyrics /Comedy
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Some friends and I were having a song writing session last night but instead we got sidetracked by a box of Lucky Charms. And because of our love of cereal, we decided to each write about LC then we all added it together to make a crazy song. This is what I came up with. Yeah it has music to go with it but I'm not a musician, I'm just a writer... so I'm no help in that department


Nothing Beats Marshmellows



I grab my bowl
I grab my spoon
Can't wait to bite into that moon
I love the rainbows

Purple, blue, and green, and pink
I pour the milk
They start to sink
Nothing beats marshmellows

Don't you eat my cereal
If you do
I will kill you!
Lucky, Lucky Charms




Submitted on 2007-04-24 21:33:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This made me giggle. I rarely see lighthearted poetry about such silly things. I love Lucky Charms. Mmm.
| Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
  You can talk about killing while eating and writing about Lucky Charms? That's just wrong. Rainbows, stars and little leprechauns? Killing? Nah. Either get rid of or change the last stanza.

You guys must have done a lot more eating than writing! mae
| Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]
  Got milk? Ha, I meant... got music for this little ditty of yours? I find it really hard to know if these lyrics work or not without the music, that's all.

But, this... it's funny, and does the trick. Made me smile, yup.

Peace,

Jase
| Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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