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the day


Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
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Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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the day



The sun is up and so am i,
With my hands i reach for the sky,
Each morning becomes a new day,
Time to strech and be on my way,
Cant waste the time its seconds are so gold,
Dont want to lose minites there precious im told,
So i take the day as a gift u see,
Cause each day is a blessing for you and me




Submitted on 2007-04-25 00:28:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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