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Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
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Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Patches of breath and feelings of high,
Loss of emotion as i fall from the sky,
Catch me please im falling so fast,
Fellings of fear how long will it last,
Catch my smile ill put it away,
For i am stressed and cant smile today,
To be so young and so so me,
Looking ahead of what life is to be,
The future is the present memorys are the past,
On the journy of life how long will it last.

Submitted on 2007-04-25 00:46:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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