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    dots Submission Name: a fight within my minddots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 736
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       this one is alot more different than what i ussually do. just so many thoughts in my head, and i have to focus to find myself to get everything back under control.
    you could say that this is my regret...
    this goes to them...the ones i loved but they only used me. they drained all my emotiion at the time and left me to die in my mentallity.


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    dotsa fight within my minddots
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    your with me always
    during the night and throughout the day
    but not at my side
    just in my mind
    its like my paradise (or even a heaven)
    like getting lucky 7's when you roll a dice

    but thats in my mind
    the place and time i cant yet find
    not anymore at least
    so i wait till i am deceased
    maybe this pain might end then
    or maybe reality just might bend (just a bit)

    in my mind, is a warzone gone crazy
    but i know not my enemy
    i am losing and my mentallity is waek now
    i must take that final blow
    i confront my unknown enemy
    and its surprising to me
    ...that its you




    Submitted on 2007-04-25 13:54:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can often relate to how you feel; my mind seems to spin worlds of "IT's" own and don't fight "IT" as much as embrace "IT".

    You are unique and you will not lose the fight for there truly is no losing or winning - just BEINg.

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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