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    dots Submission Name: She's painting a picture of love.dots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 789
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    dotsShe's painting a picture of love.dots
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    She's hiding underneath
    A veil of broken dreams
    I see her crying.
    A picture painted with sorrows so deep
    She's painted a heart
    With darkness' soul
    She's shall do nothing but weep.

    -Chorus-
    She's feeling the sorrows
    Of hell's flames so deep.
    She's growing the shadows
    That no heaven shall keep.
    She's painting a portrait
    So full of pain and sadness.
    She's painting a picture of love.

    -Interlude-
    Her lips have grown a deep red
    The look in her eyes feel pain.
    Her heart has told me she's dead.
    The pain she's feeling.... She's Crying.

    -Chorus-
    She's feeling the sorrows
    Of hell's flames so deep.
    She's growing the shadows
    That no heaven shall keep.
    She's painting a portrait
    So full of pain and sadness.
    She's painting a picture of love.

    Tears have fallen
    Her world starts to shake.
    She's throwing herself
    From wall to wall with the pain.
    Her picture is running
    As it begins to fade.
    She's dying with heartache.

    -Chorus-
    She's feeling the sorrows
    Of hell's flames so deep.
    She's growing the shadows
    That no heaven shall keep.
    She's painting a portrait
    So full of pain and sadness.
    She's painting a picture of love.

    She's painting a portrait
    So full of pain and sadness.
    She's painting a picture of love.




    Submitted on 2007-04-25 13:55:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I hate the idea of love being as painful as it is but it is and that cannot be changed. I like it though. It has alot of emotion and sad thruth to it.
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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