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    dots Submission Name: Celluloiddots
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    Author: mrmundane
    ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47/96/78
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 878
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       it's about having to work to survive and having a shitty ass job to survive.


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    dotsCelluloiddots
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    remind me again why i suffer
    why every day is just simply another
    and every activity is yet another distraction
    to keep my mind absent of my dissatisfaction
    tomorrow morning i will awake; with a stride in my step
    and get called in to work for more stabs at my pep
    wilted and negligible my spirit's on fire
    and days of these things i grow to require
    how heaven has cursed us of days with these things
    of which i'd never choose over the rarity of holidays
    and seldom i speak with my own real voice
    there occurs no lasting period of personal choice
    living for us becomes a vapid accessory
    which fills my recall with a celluloid memory
    of who i am, and what everyone sees
    my dreams are the only things worth keeping for memories.




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