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    dots Submission Name: letterdots

    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       this is somthing i thought no one would ever see. i know the grammer is all wrong. but it was written from a jail cell in the middle of the night with a 1 inch long pencil. i was sobbing. and i was just trying to get that little pencil to keep up with my thoughts... anyways i love elite skills.. thank you for everything

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    Here i 'am in this cell
    these bare walls have an all to familiar smell,
    like the sad and lonely world where i use to dwell
    my love was our bond 4ever strong,
    how could it have gone wrong
    how could you doubt in me , in us
    now i lie in this cage of rust cuz i refused to give up, i refused to let them win
    an convince you my love was not genuine
    is it a sin to contend with the lies of them?
    now i lie in this cell 6 to 7 more months i will dwell but 10 years im dammed to this lonely hell without my love, my <name>
    only if she knew my heart is 4 ever true
    cant you see my pain? i cant cry your name
    your gone, im here, stuck with a love that i cant give
    stuck in this cell, caged by my love
    cant you hear my cries?
    would i have gone crazy trying to convience you of lies
    my love is true, where are you
    i changed not
    im here cuz i didn't give up
    you believed my love
    nevermind you dont care..
    thats why im here alone in this bare cell
    while your with <name> im here in love
    alone by myself

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      Aww... this poem is so sad, it made me literally wanna cry. I think the kind of insistance you have in things like you've written in this poem is really cool. Like, you didn't give up in the person you loved. I have been in that predicament where I didn't give up on the guy I loved, but mine was a tad bit different because I didn't go to jail. You are a great poet and I will be reading some more of your poems. I am gonna add this poem to my favorites!!! That's just how good it was...
    | Posted on 2007-04-26 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]

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