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    dots Submission Name: "Idiot of the First Caliber"dots
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    Author: Drifting Star
    ASL Info:    19/F/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 22/101/73
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 657
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1876



    Description:
       Written as a challenge from DaylinDiva.

    Far From Elite,

    Sennie.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dots"Idiot of the First Caliber"dots
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    For one so smart,
    I'm finding now,
    that you're an idiot of the first caliber.
    I'm thinking now,
    wondering how,
    I was ever fooled into believing.

    I told you once,
    "Best friends are rare
    cling and hold them to you".
    So what do you do?
    Abuse & Dismiss me,
    then go on to someone new.

    Looks like ya found her,
    perfect pet,
    probably has eyes like the stars.
    Probably agrees with every word ya say,
    A relationship,
    nothing like ours.

    Was ours so bad
    that you had to go
    and uproot yourself from it?
    Was ours so droll
    that nothing would serve
    til you severed all ties to it?

    Dropped me like a stone,
    sinking to the bottom,
    Was I really so easy to let go?
    I'd like to think,
    on some deeper level,
    your soul answers, "no."

    But actions speak
    louder then words.
    Nothing to do about it now.
    Can't change
    what you've done to us,
    I can only tell you how.

    You changed too fast,
    became "mature",
    Not for the good, in my opinion.
    Suddenly I'm common trash,
    Someone who you're ashamed
    to be seen with in public.

    I think maybe
    you don't realize,
    that I am YOU, in the mirror.
    Strip off the makeup and dye
    and fancy clothes,
    and we'll be twin-souls once more.

    Gaggle, hiss and print your trash,
    behind my back...you liar.
    I'm so tired of your stupidity,
    I can't observe any longer.

    Only now do I turn and stare,
    and call you an idiot of the first caliber.




    Submitted on 2007-04-25 20:59:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sounds familiar...so familiar I can't help but clap and keep repeating "Take that, jerk".

    She who must not be named is a worthless whore. Dust yourself off, take the angel with you and walk away.

    Bravo!

    Sounds like my love ballad to her. haha.
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by Nearby Thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      A venting poet, a lot like myself.
    The Rhyme scheme to fit, with a few hiccups here and there…
    You brought you point across, lashing! I felt it though the screen.

    The Title was definitely an eye catcher.
    | Posted on 2007-04-26 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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