"Cute razorblades, cut through the air, and in my fading consciousness, I saw you there..." This is by far my favorite part of this poem, because it hits close to home, so to speak. When I tried to slit my wrist, the last thing I saw before I blacked out was the face of my lost love... Never has a piece of poetry (or whatever) evoked such a deep, heartfelt reaction as this has... I,... I,... don't know what to say... except sorry that you went through such hardship (if this is about you...) Virgil
wow, words can't describe the feelings in this. It really made me think, of how superficial everything in my life is, my so called love for a guy, wow this true feelings here. thanks for the wake up call. anyways this is a wonderful poem, one of many by you. i'm beginning to really enjoy your work. great job again -steph
That was just as amazing as your last one, I love the style in which you write. It is so amazing, and you write with such a passion, and it's so amazing, no matter how many times I read it, I don't think I will ever grow tired or reading it, and I loved the end, it brought such closuer to it, and it ended in ver well, and it was so amazing in which you wrote it, and wow.
the chorus part is so wow... like you need her SO bad and shes all you want but shes not there yet instead of taking the angry fcuk you where are you when i need you tone you go for 'but it's ok' WOW... that just really struck me... yet you did see her and im wondering whether she was actually there or whether you just wanted her to be there so badly you just wrote her there... ya know? watching you die and not doing anything about it... watching you ache and maybe wanting to help but not knowing how so not doing anything... i dunno... your writes flood me with pictures... awesome write! oh an i LOVE the 'if we were perfect... without a doubt...' lines... really wow
Well first off this is becoming one of my favorites. Second you truly have an amazing talent for writing lyrics. The flow was perfect as I read it I almost feel as though I could have sang it. Your choice of words within your writing is excellent...I can't think of anyhting else to say I mean this blows me away I connected with it as if I were the person writting it, because Ive felt that way myself. Excellent work! Seriously!-John p.s. sorry I cant offer anything more constructive then praising your work.