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    dots Submission Name: The Bullet You Never Hearddots
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    Author: Butterfly Bullets
    ASL Info:    24/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 188/257/24
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsThe Bullet You Never Hearddots
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    Butterfly bullets in a back alley now
    Float up to kill me without a sound
    Cute razorblades cut through the air
    And in my fading consciousness
    I saw you there

    And I, I want you here holding my hand
    I need you here doing all you can
    But you refuse and thatís so you
    You only do what you want to
    And itís ok

    Pretty pink stars in a purple light
    Do little to signal the end of the night
    A body broken down wrapped up in violence
    Begging for the whispers
    To gently break the silence

    And I, I want you here holding my hand
    I need you here doing all you can
    But you refuse and thatís so you
    You only do what you want to
    And itís ok

    If we were perfect would we have made it this far
    Without a doubt we wouldíve burned away
    If we were perfect would we have fallen so far
    Without a doubt we wouldíve learned someday

    Make everything crystal clear
    Make everything better while youíre here
    Ice down the black and blue
    Start getting ready for one more year

    Butterfly bullets in a back alley now
    Float up to kill me without a sound
    And I saw you there




    Submitted on 2004-06-13 03:09:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The beginning and the end of this poem hold such power. I love intentional repetition, to me it is one of the greatest tools in poetry. It leaves such an impression.
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      i cant describe the way this makes me feel..but its as if i already no it..its weird.. i can see love shatter in the air and two black silouettes standing there..
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      "Cute razorblades, cut through the air, and in my fading consciousness, I saw you there..." This is by far my favorite part of this poem, because it hits close to home, so to speak. When I tried to slit my wrist, the last thing I saw before I blacked out was the face of my lost love... Never has a piece of poetry (or whatever) evoked such a deep, heartfelt reaction as this has... I,... I,... don't know what to say... except sorry that you went through such hardship (if this is about you...) Virgil
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by Lip_Gloss_and_Black | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, words can't describe the feelings in this. It really made me think, of how superficial everything in my life is, my so called love for a guy, wow this true feelings here. thanks for the wake up call. anyways this is a wonderful poem, one of many by you. i'm beginning to really enjoy your work. great job again
    -steph
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutly LOVE it. If I could sing, I would sing your songs. They are beautiful. I want to be able to say something constructive about the lyrics. But I really have nothing to say!
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      I keep reading this one, and the more I do the more I love it! I've already commented on it but it's simply wonderful!
    -steph
    | Posted on 2004-12-05 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      That was just as amazing as your last one, I love the style in which you write. It is so amazing, and you write with such a passion, and it's so amazing, no matter how many times I read it, I don't think I will ever grow tired or reading it, and I loved the end, it brought such closuer to it, and it ended in ver well, and it was so amazing in which you wrote it, and wow.

    ^Monkey
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with sadistchild.. good lyrics. I think it also has a nice flow and sense of imagery. The title of this peice is really unique. It was a good write.
    | Posted on 2004-06-13 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      This are really good lyrics, so sweet and sad. I have no bad things to say about it and, sorry but I don't have any constructive critisism either.
    | Posted on 2004-06-13 00:00:00 | by sadistchild | [ Reply to This ]
      the chorus part is so wow... like you need her SO bad and shes all you want but shes not there yet instead of taking the angry fcuk you where are you when i need you tone you go for 'but it's ok' WOW... that just really struck me... yet you did see her and im wondering whether she was actually there or whether you just wanted her to be there so badly you just wrote her there... ya know? watching you die and not doing anything about it... watching you ache and maybe wanting to help but not knowing how so not doing anything... i dunno... your writes flood me with pictures... awesome write! oh an i LOVE the 'if we were perfect... without a doubt...' lines... really wow
    | Posted on 2004-08-28 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Well first off this is becoming one of my favorites. Second you truly have an amazing talent for writing lyrics. The flow was perfect as I read it I almost feel as though I could have sang it. Your choice of words within your writing is excellent...I can't think of anyhting else to say I mean this blows me away I connected with it as if I were the person writting it, because Ive felt that way myself. Excellent work! Seriously!-John
    p.s. sorry I cant offer anything more constructive then praising your work.
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]


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