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    dots Submission Name: My burning heartdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 680
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1270



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    dotsMy burning heartdots
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    -Chorus-
    I've awaited the day
    For you to return,
    A fateful day
    When you put out
    My burning heart
    With your heavenly waters
    So cold and frail.

    Lowly I fade into everlasting dark
    The shadows ablaze
    In this once mysterious heart.
    Waiting for death to come and take
    Our last breath right away.
    Our hearts are weeping
    This everlasting sadness
    It hits our graves.

    -Chorus-
    I've awaited the day
    For you to return,
    A fateful day
    When you put out
    My burning heart
    With your heavenly waters
    So cold and frail.

    Time has driven by
    I waited for years.
    You came back to me
    In these cold arms,
    Which had bought you tears.
    The heart so strong
    But a mind so weak
    The heavens in clouds
    It's hell that we seek.

    -Chorus-
    I've awaited the day
    For you to return,
    A fateful day
    When you put out
    My burning heart
    With your heavenly waters
    So cold and frail.

    My burning heart
    Which has been put out
    With your heavenly waters.




    Submitted on 2007-04-26 12:38:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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