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    dots Submission Name: Acceptancedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 830
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    Description:
       Things are going as planned.. slowly but truely things will be over and i'll be able to allow this part of my life to stay where it belongs and that is the past. Within time, things will go my way. Just need to give it time!


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    What have i done...?

    These tears become refimilarized with these cheeks of mine.
    All of what I have done comes racing back to me
    As if its a nightmare..

    I remember those nights I cried on your shoulder
    Telling you..
    Yelling to you..
    If something ever happened to you...

    I'd be lost..
    Lost because you were there for me when everyone else abounded me
    Lost because you seem to actually care for me..

    But it become obvious to me that you simply cared for my body and what you got from it.

    And here I have lost you...
    I've put you away from the things you need to be put away for

    Yet I feel so guilty..
    I feel as if I've betrayed you..
    Along with the trust you gave me
    I feel as if I have betrayed the trust of someone

    Whom honestly cared and loved me
    Although you showed your loved in all the wrong ways... you still loved me

    But I cannot allow your loved and your presence in my life to excuse you from your actions...

    Shit has hit the fan my friend...
    And I will not sleep until you get what you deserve!!!!!!!!




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      Heheh, nice one. I like the
    Yet I feel so guilty..
    I feel as if I've betrayed you..
    Along with the trust you gave me
    I feel as if I have betrayed the trust of someone

    Just makes me think about something. Anyways, another stunning poem, and keep em coming, lol. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-04-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems the word acceptance effects everyone ecspecially todaz generation
    i dont no maybe i;m just old school i don't worry to much wether people like me or not
    i pretty much and still do what and say what i want

    anywaz great write and very good readingfor all ages to appreciate

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I don't really know what to say. I have found myself in that situation so many times but I still haven't figured out what to do about it. The best thing is to stop yourself from feeling guilty. It's not going to do you any good. Anyway it's a good write keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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