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    dots Submission Name: Venom Vixendots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsVenom Vixendots
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    I had lain awake
    for the last 3 weeks
    with whispering winds
    howling like hounds
    streaming letters
    with a serpents tail
    to create her name.

    Her name
    fragile as petals
    but a powerful poison
    that swallow souls
    for the pleasure
    of knowing
    the lips
    of an opposite faith
    before slowly diminishing
    and dissipating
    the creature, the Men
    from every Earthly
    and aquatic surfaces
    one by one.

    No way to avoid
    being bludgeoned by
    voodoo venom.
    Powerful to paralyse!
    Powerful to kill!!




    Submitted on 2007-04-26 14:32:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      these words are very well chosen and powerful
    i remember the phrase vixen in my fathers ere
    this is a great piece of reading and writing

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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