Venom Vixen

Author: caballero7137 ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123 Words: 91

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Venom Vixen

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I had lain awake for the last 3 weeks with whispering winds howling like hounds streaming letters with a serpents tail to create her name. Her name fragile as petals but a powerful poison that swallow souls for the pleasure of knowing the lips of an opposite faith before slowly diminishing and dissipating the creature, the Men from every Earthly and aquatic surfaces one by one. No way to avoid being bludgeoned by voodoo venom. Powerful to paralyse! Powerful to kill!!

Submitted on 2007-04-26 14:32:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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these words are very well chosen and powerful i remember the phrase vixen in my fathers ere this is a great piece of reading and writing sandman

| Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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