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Venom Vixen


Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
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Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Venom Vixen



I had lain awake
for the last 3 weeks
with whispering winds
howling like hounds
streaming letters
with a serpents tail
to create her name.

Her name
fragile as petals
but a powerful poison
that swallow souls
for the pleasure
of knowing
the lips
of an opposite faith
before slowly diminishing
and dissipating
the creature, the Men
from every Earthly
and aquatic surfaces
one by one.

No way to avoid
being bludgeoned by
voodoo venom.
Powerful to paralyse!
Powerful to kill!!




Submitted on 2007-04-26 14:32:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  these words are very well chosen and powerful
i remember the phrase vixen in my fathers ere
this is a great piece of reading and writing

sandman
| Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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