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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Youdots
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    Author: numbertwenty
    ASL Info:    16 Female
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 55/25/9
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 923
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 274



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    dotsBeautiful Youdots
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    I see the ocean in your eyes
    merciless in their majesty.
    I feel the red of your hair
    hypnotic with each touch.
    I taste the apples of your lips
    drowning in this glory.
    I hear the deep drum of your heart
    giving in to this rush.




    Submitted on 2007-04-26 16:18:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good descriptions in this poem! Makes you feel alive when you read it(smile)
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty cool write. good job. I liked how simple it was, but it said what needed to be said. Good job.
    | Posted on 2007-04-26 00:00:00 | by blue_pixie_dust | [ Reply to This ]


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