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I first noticed the bubbles in your words several months ago, when you were experiencing your first bout of existential angst like a childhood virus that, left inexperienced for so long, made up for lost time by worming straight to the core. You spoke in code, speech erratic with popping words scorching with some internal heat that stewed in the back of your throat, baking shadows into your eyes. Left alone, you seethed at the edges, blackening your brain with dark ideas and convoluted thoughts that made sense on the surface, but really just added fuel to the flame with imponderable questions and answers that didn’t actually answer anything at all. I am wracked with worry for you, but those mental incendiaries are too flammable for my unskilled firefighting. I have taken to watching you carefully, because although it is far too late to stop you from bubbling, perhaps I can prevent you from boiling over. |
You spoke in code, speech erratic with popping words Scorching with some internal heat that stewed In the back of your throat, baking shadows into your eyes. Left alone, you seethed at the edges, blackening your brain With dark ideas and convoluted thoughts that made sense On the surface, but really just added fuel to the flame With imponderable questions and answers that didn’t Actually answer anything at all. I love this. Such clear descriptive language, this is in my opinion the most powerful stanza. if I had to choose a favorite line from amongst the many gems though, it would have to be "baking shadows into your eyes." I don't like the word firefighter though, instead I would write "To be extinguished". that's my only nitpick. Great work_devoted. | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by devoted_dozer | [ Reply to This ] | |