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    dots Submission Name: tadowdots
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    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 22/20/25
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Stairway home
    I'm walking up alone
    Got to hold the railing
    My walls are failing
    His ship was sailing but
    the ocean went pale

    My face went very white
    The ghost of my insides
    was left outside to die

    I think so hard and dream of things
    That I do not really need to see
    But I play myself that way
    in hopes of a different game
    Each time it ends up the same

    Who knows where he went?
    I do, and then I realize what he meant
    He said my walls should be cement

    So I started building
    And I built on a hill
    The breeze was a tease
    But it never bothered me

    So now I remember
    what this is about
    it's about my mind
    and how it's a cloud

    Through thoughts, I float
    on my great big green boat
    And I've kissed so many swamp toads
    You'd never want to know

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    Where did I go wrong? I had this beautiful song that I was singing. It ended up singing me to sleep and I didn't even have to weep. My sight is full of creeps. Junkie faces and Jesus freaks. I don't know what I mean but I know that I mean something. I mean something!!

    What do you mean? How do you mean it and why are you so mean? My face is green now, not with envy, but with reptilian force. I am a wicked, scaly horse. What a strange dream that would seem to be and seem to mean but who knows why I even dream of these things. I think I force myself to hate me.





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      I really like the last two stanzas, they are very powerful. It is a nice free style. It held my attention well, because the entire time I was trying to interpret your meaning. I am at a loss to the original point, but the emotion behind it is evident. Very nice.
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2008-08-31 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      You have some really excellent lines and rhymes. I like the way you think. - Jim
    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the less structured part at the end. I used to try to write with no obvious breaks to make the reader have to work for the rhyme but it never came off as good as this.
    well done.
    Josh
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]


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