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    dots Submission Name: Jibbery La La Ladots
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    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 22/20/25
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsJibbery La La Ladots
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    eyes preciously shining with passion
    pronounced and protruding
    evoking memories and fears with which
    she has no compassion
    she walks a straight line
    no longer between here and there
    she is changed and presence pronunciates

    touch no longer reigns over truth here
    glory beats charm and lust any day
    she took her suitcase with her when she left
    and eventually you both walked right out the door

    nurturing is no longer becoming of that queen,
    she can not heal you, she can not heal me
    for she is only as strong as she can be
    test her waves if you do not see
    and you can feel your way out of this haze
    it is, after all, only one big maze

    ..eyesight began to blur there, just for a moment
    and i looked into it and i honed it
    and i zoned in on your vibration
    i sought out your mind, and i took my sweet time
    i was dreaming that i was seeing a being
    that was never there, or is barely there

    i stared at you for miles and miles during our journey
    and i faded such a life away
    but you remained running in that race
    of thieves and rats and open space
    you played your game for good or bad, you played it hard
    the race is over and i have never known such an awful taste

    getting spit in the face.




    Submitted on 2007-04-27 10:03:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very well written. Great use of words. It seems that talking bout a female roll model or your mom that hurt you really bad,but i aint at the best judging peices like this...
    I really like this stanza

    "nurturing is no longer becoming of that queen,
    she can not heal you, she can not heal me
    for she is only as strong as she can be
    test her waves if you do not see
    and you can feel your way out of this haze
    it is, after all, only one big maze"

    It's has so much feeling behind it....well this was a great peice well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work...

    Max
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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