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    dots Submission Name: The Flourescent Light Districtdots

    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Flourescent Light Districtdots

    The Flourescent Light District

    Deeper into the Parisian street
    Ignore the people you’re likely to meet
    The neon, argon glowing lights
    Illuminate the mounting fights

    It’s the comedy of errors
    And a carnival of terrors
    You fend for yourself in this town
    For this is the flourescent light district
    And it’s sure to bring you down.

    Even mannequins dress as whores
    As girls wait smoking in open doors
    Be careful as you walk by
    Be careful not to catch her eye
    She’ll do whatever she’s told
    She’ll leave the silver
    But take your gold

    Girls with their red lights
    Police with their blue
    This is the flourescent light district
    And it’s appealing to you

    Roxanne’s put on her dress tonight
    Walking the streets for money
    Do you think it’s right?
    But still you walk
    Through the flourescent light district
    And still you talk
    To the bartender like
    It’s all OK
    To be a slave
    To the Moulin Rouge.

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