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    dots Submission Name: This Is Medots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       I would just like to introduce myself once again.


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    dotsThis Is Medots
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    A shy smile that lights up the room
    Burning curiousity that consumes
    Eyes shining with untold emotions
    A mouth that puts voice to my mind

    I'm someone you didn't expect to find
    Caught up in very sexual thoughts
    Or if you first got that impression of me
    Surprised to know I'm at the top of my classes

    I like to make you laugh and smile
    Say things that will drop your jaw
    I try to be a friend you remember
    When you're feeling high or low

    Parents wish they had me for a daughter
    Though my dad knows I could do better
    I keep secrets that I hope he never finds
    Always worried he will see through the lies

    I'll tell you I never want to get married
    Never want to have children in my life
    But that's only to cover up my fear
    That I'll make a bad mother and a lousy wife

    Maybe I seem different to you in your eyes
    But this is who I see when I look in the mirror
    Excuse me for being blunt and unforgiving
    This is just how my world is used to living




    Submitted on 2007-04-27 18:02:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is lovely, Katanya! It seems like an intimate talk with a close, good friend! You put in verse some big, bad fears that frankly all of us share ie fears that we wouldn't be a good parent or worthy of children. We all feel more transparent than we really are, and you have echoed these human feelings very well! Very incisive and enjoyable verse!
    | Posted on 2007-07-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I get a sense of you here, a strong one. It seems like you were making an attempt to just put parts of who you are into words, and this time, it worked.

    Nice job, Katana.

    --crimson
    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good...expressing how teenagers cover there feeling up and depressed and play it cool and not ppl know you are really hurting,,,the only thing is that it was choppy...kinda had to read though it a couble times....but other than that it was really good...

    Well i hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work...

    Max
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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