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    dots Submission Name: Deep from the grave.dots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
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       Everyone has a little light in them even if they are Wiccans


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    dotsDeep from the grave.dots
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    Crawl into darkness
    In spite
    With flowers.
    You sent the devil's plans
    To their grave.
    Set the reapers heart
    On fire
    Releasing all hell
    Into heavens gates.

    -Chorus-
    Only you could cure
    The darkness inside me
    Brought all heaven to earth
    And shattered hell's remains.
    The devil inside is now weeping
    Witnessing your eyes
    Deep from the grave.

    All seems hopeless
    And life I'm losing.
    Tears begin to run down your face.
    Sitting to wait for a miracle.
    A witness to death
    You've become again.

    -Chorus-
    Only you could cure
    The darkness inside me
    Brought all heaven to earth
    And shattered hell's remains.
    The devil inside is now weeping
    Witnessing your eyes
    Deep from the grave.

    Satan runs and hides with sorrow.
    Losing his grasp on me once again,
    You touched my lips with a kiss so thoughtful.
    Another chance was given to surely rein.




    Submitted on 2007-04-28 06:35:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure whose side you're on here, as far as the good-versus-evil thing; seems almost like a prayer for escape from darkness, but you say it's a dark-themed song...huh. It's well-written anyway. I like the imagery of "brought all heaven to earth/ and shattered hell's remains," you can almost imagine a clash between the light of the stars and the light of an infernal fire. Keep it up; you've got promise.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-04-28 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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