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    dots Submission Name: White Satin Angel dots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I realized last night how much he means to me. <3


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    dotsWhite Satin Angel dots
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    Beautiful angel,
    laying between sheets,
    of satin white,
    and intertwined between
    dreams, and love.

    He smiles half heartedly,
    and wraps his worked fingers,
    around mine,
    and he pulls me closer.

    Angel's eyes reveal everything.
    they hold both the sun and the moon,
    and everything in between.


    The piano's melody never ends,
    playing tunes of this love,
    light hearted, and soft.

    And Angel and I lay there,
    together, underneath
    white satin sheets,
    hidden from troubles,
    and hidden from the world.

    I curl up to Angel,
    and thank him,
    for the sunsets and memories,
    for both kisses and tears.

    Angel pulls me closer once more,
    with parted lips,
    they meet once more.




    Submitted on 2007-04-28 13:38:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What a sweet and dreamlike love poem! Jordynn, you have a developing talent that is remarkable for someone so young!
    | Posted on 2007-08-31 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it a lot!! It showed passion. It was wonderful, a little choppy though, I didn't really like that, but it was still wonderful. Keep writing.

    Anna
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]


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