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    dots Submission Name: In The Name Of Lovedots

    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 667
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    dotsIn The Name Of Lovedots

    Im simply too late,
    oh so very late,
    to even rescue
    one single breath
    from the one and only rose
    with a sickly sweet scent.

    I stand with tears
    by my loves side
    as serpent geysers
    of bubbly foam bleach
    rocket out the mouth,
    wilting the purple skies
    and the damp dim lit air.
    While having my Life
    so suddenly broken
    by the hands of faith,
    I fear I cannot look
    at another woman
    and feel the spark
    that ignited my heart.

    Farewell world
    as I cast
    my final breath
    and final kiss
    on my one true Love
    swallowing the bleach
    so simply so soon
    well be reunited
    as we blossom
    once more.

    Submitted on 2007-04-28 15:18:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hello again. Well i dont know if that photo of yours is you but this poem was a little not so exciting as i expected. No description?

    There is no intensity in the poem. Its just a plain one expressing that some one broke up with you according to my perception.

    Its a small one to read too.

    This would have been better in the below format

    "xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx, xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx,
    yyyyyyyyyyyyyyy, yyyyyyyyyyyyyyy."

    Otherwise a good piece.
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]

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