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    dots Submission Name: With you.dots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 688
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 847



    Description:
       Another off of the top of the head.


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    dotsWith you.dots
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    I'm in love with you
    It's tearing me apart.
    All this time I spend
    It's all for you.
    It's all a dream,
    So don't wake me up.

    -Chorus-
    All I need is you
    I want to spend this
    Last little time I have.
    I want it all to be with you.
    I want this everlasting happiness.

    I need to be with you,
    Your sweet scent
    crawling around my face.
    I'm craving you,
    To bring me light
    And end this cruelty.

    -Chorus-
    All I need is you
    I want to spend this
    Last little time I have.
    I want it all to be with you.
    I want this everlasting happiness.

    All I ever wanted was you
    I'd die for your mercy
    I'd die to be with you.




    Submitted on 2007-04-28 16:28:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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