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    dots Submission Name: broken glassdots
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    Author: poppi
    Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 72/55/37
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       so i wrote this about alcholism, i'm open to critiscm. I personally liked it, but let me know what you think.

    Also i know not everybodies experiances with alchol have been the same, i'm not trying to make you see it my way or change you mind. This was just what i was feeling at the time.


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    dotsbroken glassdots
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    I walk along the broken glass
    So now the blood is streaming
    These bottles sute the mass
    Silently screaming
    Alcholic congregation
    Ignorant to my misery
    Unwoken proclomation,
    The words not writen in history
    A taste of creation
    Poisions in a lethal dose
    Suicide sold to the generation
    i can't handle being this close

    Hidden faces
    Surrendering to the prophocy
    Scared by their disgraces
    Commited in jealousy
    My words have fallen
    The glass is imbeded to deep
    This time, Gabrieal has callen
    Follow like sheep
    You'll soon learn this misconception
    Come decievers and lost ones
    This is Lucifer's deception




    Submitted on 2007-04-28 22:26:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, I have never been an alcoholic, but I imagine that it feels like that poem. That is a very sad life, and it really is like Lucifer is telling you, "Oh, you need that drink." But, I don't really know what to say about it because I've never been down that road. It is a very good poem, though.
    -AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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