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    dots Submission Name: “It's My Song, And I'm Totally Lost”dots
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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 365/572/251
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 300
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 988



    Description:
       Inspired by a certain thing said by a certain someone.


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    dots“It's My Song, And I'm Totally Lost”dots
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    All I need are the chord changes;
    please, let them flow harmoniously
    into a melody that is pleasing
    yet not... trite. Nor common, please...

    Oops! Was that my entrance?
    I missed it entirely.
    Do I get a re-do? Can I try again?
    I know this is the concert,
    and we’ve had so many rehearsals,
    but I can’t seem to get the timing right.
    I can’t seem to understand the melody,
    for it has been arranged by
    an... interesting composer.

    Ah, but... good! Good now;
    here’s the part I understand,
    here’s the part I can remember.
    This segment is my favorite
    and I effortlessly ease into the music.

    Which part went where;
    have we played it, and are we...
    there?

    I know, I know; It’s my song, darlings,
    it’s my song; I should know how it goes,
    I should.

    It’s my song, and I’m totally lost.




    Submitted on 2007-04-29 01:13:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is an amusing piece!

    You played with the formatting well; you have directed the reader how to react and read in every possible way.(at least you aren't lost on one thing) It's a very enthusiastic piece.

    I adore the character...so unfocused and excited and anxious.

    Ah, but... good! Good now;
    here’s the part I understand,
    here’s the part I can remember.
    This segment is my favorite
    and I effortlessly ease into the music.

    Which part went where;
    have we played it, and are we...
    there?


    Just wonderful. I love it.

    I can't offer you any suggestions at the moment...
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by Agent V. | [ Reply to This ]



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