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    dots Submission Name: For When The Sun And Earth Collide- reviseddots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       revised from orgonal. what do you think


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    dotsFor When The Sun And Earth Collide- reviseddots
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    This is a letter written to yourself;
    Reminding you that your beautiful
    just in case there is no one else.

    Spend less time dwelling,
    on past events gone wrong.
    Instead develop a new passion.
    To live your life strong.

    Work on your anger,
    though we all get mad.
    Know that it's alright to sleep alone,
    and that really it's not that bad.

    Don't ignore your new bitterness,
    and how you've enabled it to grow.
    Confront your frustrations and feelings,
    even the ones you have never let known.

    Next handle your issues.
    Learn not every man will just use you.
    Respect every aspect of yourself.
    Or else no one else will.

    Think about everything...
    "Why is this such a big deal?"

    Break down your blackened boundries.
    Slam through your inner restrictions.
    Stop to re-navigate your previous positions.
    Count on no one to be by your side,
    but, most importantly, be aware when someone is.
    Learn just how far you have fallen,
    and then figure out why you did.

    Remember that the pain always subsides.
    Making your exsistense a lot easier,
    when the earth and sun collide.
    You can make it.

    This is a letter from yourself...
    With love.




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      you have a great wisdom with your words i feel that in order to see this moment as well as you did you must be able to see so much more in every other aspect of life; and that feeling is why i like this poem. its beautiful and empowering for any kind of reader in any kind of struggle they mite be in, to read this in a down moment like now has been inspiring.

    thanks for writing this



    -sam
    | Posted on 2010-11-09 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      ps... thanks for the comment : )
    | Posted on 2009-01-28 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi.... very cool poem.. loved the this a letter from.... a-t-tack.. different, clever... intelligent ! well waddya know !

    cool
    | Posted on 2009-01-28 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is incredible. I'm generally not this dramatic, but this is really great. You sound like Gandhi or something, what a great way to portray your words through a 'letter from yourself'. I definately felt something reading this, its brilliant.
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by southernswagger | [ Reply to This ]


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