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my angel


Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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my angel



uncertain promises
but certain love.

at unholy hours
does joy return
to my empty body
and my dry soul
with an angel's voice
and precious words
the touch of death
but the kiss of life.

the ghosts of the past
spooked away
a divine moment
sacrosanct.

waves of bliss
overwhelm
with this sinless sin
i am complete.




Submitted on 2007-04-29 03:43:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really like this, its like the love you expirience is both your downfall and yet at the same time the thing that keeps you going, i can relate and i really like the way you put it into words
| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
  This was pretty good...Good use of words but the use of angel n poetry now days and alwys has been it doensn't stand out there with some of those pieces...think with some tweaking it could....you have somthing hear.....


Well hope to hear form you and keep up the good work...

Max
| Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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