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    dots Submission Name: eclipsesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    under april moons
    a fine rain
    anoints my canary
    machinery

    I eat the fruits promised to autumn

    I am speaking from the heart

    you have it in the holes of your eyes

    songs trickle your name setting off residua
    for the thousand cities
    interred in my soul discorda

    desiderata illumines suicided stares rhomboid
    in the boudoir mirror caterwaul
    outrances swim in the dampness
    of my brain laughsick

    in silver weather I fly
    powerfully through silence
    full sail
    clipsing handsome jewels
    in my beak
    trailing blue vapors

    always on infinite shelving
    of ledges...the words
    get whited out
    as like make me tired
    as not




    Submitted on 2007-04-29 03:54:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i am too tired to sleep and your too awake to move. find the eyes that are only holes. where tomorrow is the on solice you can find.

    jewel you'll find her

    shaDow
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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