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    dots Submission Name: the red earthdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsthe red earthdots
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    I was born from a gentle rise
    in the left trouser-leg
    of my father

    my mother's kiss formed me into a fish

    inside their volcano of approval
    I discovered a legendary
    moonsplit plum where I slept
    an eternal history
    of nine months
    in the land of trembling water

    the great earthquake of my mother's body
    was my first poem




    Submitted on 2007-04-29 03:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    shAdow
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      my mother's kiss formed me into a fish

    lol

    interesting..
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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