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    dots Submission Name: the farewell machinedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 566
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 609



    Description:
        in venusian feral wonderment
    we spread our legs
    through mirrors
    where our holes make meals
    of each other
    the geometry is simple
    & ancient
    ice floes form the fingertips
    of one tiny thousand dreams
    a stillness blossoms in the eyes
    waking up orange mounds
    of sighs
    any tendency toward symmetry
    guides the secret interior
    to its fiery heaven
    where the scent of hours
    drifts endlessly to a point
    of perfect rest


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    dotsthe farewell machinedots
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    listening to pearl bailey while
    lying in bed
    I realize I don't need
    to see a shrink
    break up with my lover
    or go underground for any hard
    adjustments to my already
    busted soul interior
    I breathe through a head
    of exploded lightbulbs
    madjuggler potionists
    stir my insides
    to a luminous boil
    when night's reddening
    furnace fades
    my hands will form an invisible
    bird gesture
    and slip slowly
    toward the circle of horizon
    lovely to be born
    and here to have seen it




    Submitted on 2007-04-29 12:13:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      partign is such sweet sorrow. to morrow the sky's will part on the other side. and those dark lovers will embrace in eternity. well put.

    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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