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    dots Submission Name: Special friends until the enddots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSpecial friends until the enddots
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    You said we were special friends
    special friends until the end.
    well l have something to say:
    You were my special friend,
    for l thought it was never going to end,
    but now l know
    all good things come to an end,
    and you are no longer what l would call a friend.

    My heart no longer beats for the likings of you.
    To me, you are nothing but untrue.
    You try to place truth where truth holds no meaning,
    this time l will not play your fool,
    so away with you-------
    Never again will l call you my friend,
    for this is the end.








    Submitted on 2007-04-29 18:01:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was well written short but it got straight the point the flow was great and everything fit din't seem like u forced it....I really like the last stanza..def teh ending

    "so away with you-------
    Never again will l call you my friend,
    for this is the end. "

    well hope to year from ya and keep up the good work...

    Max
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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