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    dots Submission Name: The Waters of Lethedots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Waters of Lethedots
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    We kneel, naked and willing, by the river
    awaiting baptism in the waters of Lethe
    an eager embrace to erase
    all the lessons our ancestors never learnt.
    And after the slate has been wiped clean
    we rush out to make the same mistakes
    over


    and over



    again.


    I tell you
    history is wasted on humanity.




    Submitted on 2007-04-30 03:09:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece contains so many elements and is like a little cosmos of example. Yes, we observe history, aback, and still can not see the forest through the trees we have planted upon the experience past.

    Great!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      What an interesting take on baptism, and, I've learned a little Greek in this wonderful write of yours. Excellent word choices. It starts out strong, and, in my opinion, ends strong.
    The only thing I noticed was, "I tell you" seems out of character with the rest of the write.
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Wild Flower | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an ironic take on history, I think. 'Eager to erase the lessons our ancestors never learnt'. Making the same mistake over and over again. This is because history is not so much wasted as it is neglected or taken for granted; the men who record it page by page never learn from its lessons, which is its essential purpose in our existence.

    I love the imagery in the first few lines, too. Beautiful work.
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
      This is kind of an ironic take on history, I think. 'Eager to erase the lessons our ancestors never learnt'. To make the same mistake over and over again. I can also see some subtle reflection on religion's part in that.

    History is wasted on men who never learn from it, which is the essential purpose of its existence.

    Nice points, I loved the brief imagery you give in the first few lines.
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
      Great concept!
    Lethe, nice choice of words "the river of forgetfulness" in greek ;)

    overall good write!

    "We rush out to make the same mistakes"
    That's the history i know ;)

    God Bless,
    Dennis
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliance. Every line, every word, drips and oozes complete and utter brilliance. The imagery, the diction, heck even the form.

    I tell you
    history is wasted on humanity.


    A Favourite!
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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