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    dots Submission Name: Tears of a Clown- Part 9dots

    Author: wilted_flower
    ASL Info:    22 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 42/56/28
    Words: 344
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
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    dotsTears of a Clown- Part 9dots

    Later that evening as they sat curled up together on the sofa; Tom caught a glimpse of the gold beneath her pale t-shirt, he tried to ignore it but it didn’t work, it kept catching his eye. Eventually he had to ask “What’s that?” Lilly looked up at him and her eyes grew wide “it’s… nothing”, she lowered her eyes to the floor, there was no way she could lie. The ring hung around her neck like a lead weight and it burned at her soul, she couldn’t lie with something so pure and honest close to her heart. Tom turned his attention back to the grainy TV, but it didn’t occupy his mind, she hadn’t told him what it was and the curiosity and paranoia sat there eating away at him, “please Lilly, what is it?” She looked him in the face as she replied “Don’t ask, you don’t want to know Tom, you just don’t want to know.” But he did want to know, he wanted to know so badly, his voice raised a notch “for God’s sake Lilly! Can you just answer the bleeding question?!” She snapped her head round to face him, the level of his voice had angered her “You want to know? You really want to know?!!!!” They were both riled and for once Tom was really losing his cool with her, he didn’t know what had made all this emotion spring forth but he was not about to stop. “Yes, YES I really, really do!” She snapped and the honesty flowed out of her mouth before she could stop it. “It’s an engagement ring off Sam, the man from University, remember him? The only man I ever loved!” with that she jumped off the sofa and ran out of the front door, Tom sat there for a while but with a heavy heart and tearful sob he made his way up the stairs and to bed. He knew she’d come back, he thought he could read her like a book.

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      Fleur, Part 9 is excellent also! By all means, we want more installments! The title is excellent, and the story is really good! The title "Tears of a Clown" goes "right to the core" of the reader, and has a compelling, emotional invitation! Excellent work, Fleur!
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      ohhh thats good! really good. its always good at the end too...it makes me want to read more..but of coures i have to wait until you write more. honestly you need to write a book...i would buy it..and i could get alot of people to buy it. you are an amazing writer...you really have a natural talent...keep it up

    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]

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