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    dots Submission Name: Divine Liedots

    Author: remedy bayden
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 108/106/44
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       The person has been raped and then thinks that suicide is the only way out, basically.

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    dotsDivine Liedots

    A Blossom of love
    where innocence meets
    his gentle hand holding
    your heart while it beats

    What once was a dream
    has now been destroyed
    as he beats you down like
    a broken old toy

    His grip is firm
    on your neck very tight
    you say your final prayer
    and beg for good night

    The cold wind tembles
    on your bare naked flesh
    who would have thought he
    would leave you such a mess

    The moon shines on your skin
    with a red october glow
    The scratches run down your limbs
    like a provackative show

    Why'd you have to live
    through such a horrible night
    leaving the rest of your life
    a huge black fright

    On the ground you laid praying
    to stick it with might
    but you knew to yourself
    you'd fall down to the knife

    The cold wind is blowing
    on bare naked arm
    the razor slides down
    no need to be alarmed

    The red greed comes rushing
    your breathing becomes shallow
    your life is a dissappointment
    and your eyes become hallow

    Death is upon you
    like a knock on the door
    curled up on the cold ground
    your breath comes no more

    Submitted on 2007-04-30 08:42:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      but, why is it so dark... I jst dont understand why u call it as "divine lie"

    fancy, u must write more positive stuff. u really freaked me out with this one.

    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      That was absolutly amazing. You can definatly feel the emotion in it. It's a really depressing subject but you wrote it very well. Definatly going into my fav.s
    | Posted on 2007-05-01 00:00:00 | by bloodydreamer27 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... that is really good..its kinda depressing...in a good way though...you feel the emotion...very well writen...keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]

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