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    dots Submission Name: Simple Poetdots

    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSimple Poetdots

    Words flowing inside of me, coming out
    so you can see.
    Everything I will always be.
    No need for words with deep meaning that
    hide from view my true feelings.
    It is just me, plain as can be.
    The way I live.
    My life, my love, my pain. my words for
    you to see.
    The simple poet inside of me.

    Submitted on 2004-06-13 11:49:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this piece. the title is so fitting for it. it is short and sweet and to the simple point. nothing fancy. just the simple poet. great write. but it think if you changed your line breaks up a little differently it might make it flow better. Like add"coming out" to the beginning of line two. and add "My words for" to the beginning of the second to last line. on line four delete "that" and add it to the beginning of line five, and i dont mean to sound picky, i really like it, i just think maybe i like symetry too! thanks for the read!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. It is short and it can be difficult to convey an idea or emotion in a short piece, but you pulled it off well here. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem speaks volumes in mere sentences. I feel that it beautifully captures the soul of a writer/poet. It is simple yet expressive. excellent job!
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      to whom it was i dont know, but was poigant and cud have been a bit more comple so to speak.
    it is just that u have written a simple poet in simple terms has suggetively risen u to a good level
    i.e. u have conveyed a lot with simple words
    nice work
    have a nice day
    | Posted on 2004-06-14 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed. Very simple, very well-stated. Many poets try to use big, ambiguous words to explain things, and it can ruin it sometimes. A lot more about this world could be understood if we just looked at it with a little ray of simplicity.
    | Posted on 2004-06-13 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      very simple and well-stated. sometimes that's the way it should be. people try write all mysterious and clouded sometimes, thinking that means depth... try again! thanks for the simplicity.
    | Posted on 2004-06-13 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Very...dare i say cute? I don't know how to describe it, but it's really good but also really cute. I like the simplicity of it, which i think was in intentional, and it really worked with it. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-06-13 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]

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