Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: we are all idiots in lovedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 710
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 533



    Description:
       i know its short but i did it in about five minutes at the end of class.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotswe are all idiots in lovedots
    -------------------------------------------


    why cant these christians go on a small date?
    why do they fear a god every single day?
    why do they need permission?
    why cant they take a stand?
    why does she follow the illusion?
    why does falling in love feel good yet so bad?

    they are both so blind
    and thier mind is so weak
    he follows footsteps of those that are too kind
    a path i know he will soon see as bleak
    she looks for a love that will not hurt her
    but doesnt know that im the one for her...




    Submitted on 2007-04-30 13:41:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      No offense to you its a good poem, but how could she see that you love her when your calling her weak because of her faith? If you really cared maybe you could take an intrest in it instead of writig poems about how christians are blind and weak... i dont know maybe i got this all wrong let me know if you like
    later
    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i really like this one.....
    words to describe this....AWESOME!
    i would really love to see you add more to this, your right we all are idiots in love... i used to think that i would never get a boyfriend, but now i have the sweetes, most thoughtful guy as my boyfriend.....
    keep writing ...i think i shall add this to my favs.....

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    141649

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Love written by saartha
    untitled written by ShyOne
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Carry written by saartha
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    I Do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Fasade written by jackz
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry