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    dots Submission Name: we are all idiots in lovedots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 730
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    Bytes: 533



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       i know its short but i did it in about five minutes at the end of class.


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    dotswe are all idiots in lovedots
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    why cant these christians go on a small date?
    why do they fear a god every single day?
    why do they need permission?
    why cant they take a stand?
    why does she follow the illusion?
    why does falling in love feel good yet so bad?

    they are both so blind
    and thier mind is so weak
    he follows footsteps of those that are too kind
    a path i know he will soon see as bleak
    she looks for a love that will not hurt her
    but doesnt know that im the one for her...




    Submitted on 2007-04-30 13:41:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      No offense to you its a good poem, but how could she see that you love her when your calling her weak because of her faith? If you really cared maybe you could take an intrest in it instead of writig poems about how christians are blind and weak... i dont know maybe i got this all wrong let me know if you like
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    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i really like this one.....
    words to describe this....AWESOME!
    i would really love to see you add more to this, your right we all are idiots in love... i used to think that i would never get a boyfriend, but now i have the sweetes, most thoughtful guy as my boyfriend.....
    keep writing ...i think i shall add this to my favs.....

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]


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