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    dots Submission Name: night of the 29thdots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
    Total Views: 658
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 551



    Description:
       my mom and her boyfriend got in a fight.


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    dotsnight of the 29thdots
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    listen to them
    fighting in the room
    theyre idiots

    they fight then fuck, fight then fuck
    its a routine
    or was a routine

    after all this "love" he had for her
    he leaves her crying
    some "man" he is!

    and her! degrading herself
    letting him push and yell at her
    and she does nothing but beg for him to stay

    IDIOTS!!!
    FUCKING IDIOTS!!!
    both of them!!

    ..but what can i do
    ....thats legal?




    Submitted on 2007-04-30 13:55:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I know I shouldn't really comment on this one - for a few reasons. Not only was it just merely a rant, but I can't and won't really touch the words you said nor the way you said them. There will be no criticism, just understanding.

    Besides, I like the way you said it all. Raw and fresh. Probably why I prefer diary entry style to anything else.

    As far as fighting goes, yeah it's legal. A woman degrading herself for a man - way too common. You can fight anything to be illegal these days. Finding the right loophole can make or break you though.

    Just make sure that at the end of the day, everyone's safe and sound. Happiness is more a moment in time than a state of being. Or at least that's what it's become.
    | Posted on 2009-02-12 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]


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