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    dots Submission Name: Flaming Notes in Handdots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Haiku/Passion
    Total Views: 998
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    Description:
       Flaming Notes In Hand = Two Haikus that I decided to write for a grade in Creative Writing. I'm depressed slightly and sick so they're not the greatest things I've written in a while, bash me if you want. You're just a critique to me.


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    dotsFlaming Notes in Handdots
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    Hells in Heart -

    The Dark Fires Live
    And Just like love seems to be
    Waiting to be Lit


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    Music That is Stagnant -

    The lively green leaves
    Touched by ghosts to float in time
    To make music soar




    Submitted on 2007-04-30 16:58:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      P.S. Depression shouldn't mean bad poetry, man, it should mean damn good stuff.
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Guernica | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought these were very thought provoking. I enjoyed reading them. Never been much of a fan for structured poetry but I enjoyed them.

    -Guernica
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Guernica | [ Reply to This ]


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