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    dots Submission Name: good byedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 321
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 356
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    Bytes: 1942



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    dotsgood byedots
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    its over
    roll over
    sdo i can stomp you face out
    so you cant laugh when i pout
    so you never have to doubt
    my power
    is bigger than the highest tower
    and i shower
    with the word of my hate
    never to know if you'll be in my fate
    if you could ever relate
    to whats served on my plate
    the pain
    is all i have to gain
    and my fame
    will only be your shame
    cuz you couldnt beat me
    you couldnt even match me
    cuz im higher than you
    you dot know what to do
    when you're down with the flu
    that i gave you
    and its true
    tha i have to reassure you
    that you'll make it through
    sometimes you make me want to scream
    or maybe just make you bleed
    cuz you never heed
    the words of my light
    so you just want to fight
    but tonight
    im not havin it
    im tired and im about to throw a fit
    if you dont stop this shit
    dont lie
    about when your high
    because i know
    and i guess that goes to show
    that you're a book
    cuz i take one look
    and read your mind
    of what you want to leave behind
    and all the notes you signed
    and all the notes you were fined
    and i saw the line
    you crossed me out with
    right before you kissed my lips
    and lied again
    about how is wont end
    but i'll remind my friends
    that you're dead
    ta me
    and all the good i used to see
    and all the bullshit you made me believe
    but its time for you to leave
    so go and walk away
    and dont come back the next day
    begging me to take you back
    because now you lack
    and what used to be yours
    isnt yours anymore
    so good bye
    i wont lie
    not this time
    good bye




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