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    dots Submission Name: trinitiesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotstrinitiesdots
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    own the blown pilgrim tongue
    the restless breasts of thought
    all eyes are upon me now so i avoid all eyes
    they're raping me with eggs again
    and the pink summers inside me
    with the magnets attatched to my throat
    i'm seamless in the gutters
    weeding milky streams and such
    the poltergeists of my unfathomable heart
    sticking the local creeps with the jar

    my gourdless wonder i adore you
    as much or more than i ignore you
    your eyes the most treacherous of the lot
    the kind that are as black as my bird
    rising through the clouds like ivory ghosts
    i'm delicate in the stars
    mouth full of muscles on the arm
    distant suns around my fingers

    i'm so much more than the portrait's hammer
    the dangerous airs of holy come
    spreading the cement like the staff of moses
    my snake is apportioned to the death goddess
    when i'm stuck in the moonshine
    i'm more likely to break into threes
    taste me as i gather leaves




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      death hath no pride.


    words leaving such bitter tastes in our mouth... none like that that speaks goodbye...

    find sanctuary in the bleeding arms of autumn or ... embrase those of loveing summers warm caress.

    and tho the eyes speak no truth no that only that is in your heart cannot be stolen


    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-05-01 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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