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    dots Submission Name: be gonedots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/You left me
    Total Views: 442
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1027

       i think this is the end of my week of lyrics. i got into a rappy mood and this is what i got. a lot of angry came out but i dont think i really meant it to who it was for.

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    dotsbe gonedots

    i want you to bleed
    cuz you made me believe
    that you would leave
    but you stayed
    its you i craved
    even after my heart you slayed
    i wished you would be here the next day
    i wished you would behave
    according to my standards
    at least have better manners
    let me live in your manor
    but i guess not
    you thought
    you were too hot
    but you forgot
    that it was me that gave you your glory
    but thats a different story
    so do
    what you said you would do
    and leave me standing
    but im hand-standing
    more outstanding
    then you ever wish you could be
    so leave me
    and i'llnever walk alone
    or live life like a clone
    or chew on a rotten bone
    dont call my phone
    cuz i wont answer
    to you disaster
    im faster
    and a longer laster
    so be gone
    cuz you know you were wrong
    these are the words of my song
    be gone

    Submitted on 2007-05-01 14:29:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have been on a rap and roll!!! Sometimes it's just good to get out the emotions and put "IT" in perspective.

    I hope all is well with you girl and you're smiling - love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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