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6 Line Atheism.


Author: Ben Gunn
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Bell, book and candle,
I'm trying to handle,
an exorcism of myself...

Funny how clear it all seems, sometimes.


6 Line Atheism.



How can I believe I'll have the devil to pay,
If I don't go to church and pray?
Because if that is true - then all I can say -
Is my life on earth is hell, anyway.

I can do without your faith and spiritual giving,
I need my faith for myself just to carry on living.






Ben Gunn 1986/1992/1998




Submitted on 2007-05-01 16:02:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Just think: If you wrote two more of these as a trio, you could call it, "Atheism lines 666".
Oh yes, the tech ctritique. The meter's a bit rough, but I actually like this better than you 8-line version. This is to the point, and I think more effective.
Halleluja,
fred
| Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by fredmelden | [ Reply to This ]
  Just think: If you wrote two more of these as a trio, you could call it, "Atheism lines 666".
Oh yes, the tech ctritique. The meter's a bit rough, but I actually like this better than you 8-line version. This is to the point, and I think more effective.
Halleluja,
fred
| Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by fredmelden | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was really good. It's very powerful, it does explain a very strong point of view. I think the poem speaks for those who don't believe in a very impressive way. However, I don't agree with your writing at all. That has nothing to do with how good it is onyl because we're all supposed to have different opinions, so I still enjoyed this short and strong piece.
| Posted on 2007-05-01 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha, a true atheistic point of view. I spend enough faith in people and surviving financially, I don't need to make my life worse by having to worry about God too. You know, probably a bit tangent, but the other day we watched this show where this pastor person was telling people to plant a 'thousand dollar seed', and actually said, 'what's a thousand dollars? A house payment? Some furniture? You can't buy much furniture with that. Give it to God so he can reactivate your miracles.'

It's not even lack of belief in God, it's the corruption of religion that is driving people toward atheism or non-Christian religions. Ridiculous.

Very good points, I enjoyed it, brief as it was.
| Posted on 2007-05-01 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]


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