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    dots Submission Name: Turn Two to Thr33 and You Have Medots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1338
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    Description:
       So again, Creative Writing. This was originally this was a two tone poem, and in a sense it still is. However, this is showing three sides of me, not the original two it was supposed to have. I liked this one, but bash it if you want. it's your thoughts anyway.

    - Kyle B.


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    dotsTurn Two to Thr33 and You Have Medots
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    Part of me is neon white
    Blank and standard
    Slick yet bland
    Living in a white room known as my mind.

    Deeper outside I'm flat black
    Dead and fluent
    Smart compared to scared
    Sitting in a room with constant sounds for my head.

    With solid details that hang off my head and I'm part balloon red
    Happy to this blast
    Clowns cheery on a rainy day
    This is the mask that shows to the others in this masquerade ball.

    Two of these seem unreal, but are true,
    One of them is the only reality to you.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Kyle
    This is really good
    I liked how you showed that the colors of the world help guide our human soul forward
    I also really like how you showed that all people are created by many different personalities
    It is not just one face that we always show to others
    Again you did a really good job with this
    It was great to read your poetry again
    I always liked how your poetry always made me think
    My Mother said to Thank You for the nice words about her poetry
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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