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    dots Submission Name: The King Pat Duodots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
    Total Views: 1037
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 383



    Description:
       CREATIVE WRITING ONCE THE F*&K AGAIN. yay.

    Anyway, so these are two limericks I decided to write in serious.

    Yeah. King pat duo. he's an ass.


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    dotsThe King Pat Duodots
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    To some people Pat was a jerk,
    To those people he gave a smirk
    He sat on the throne
    Until mother came home
    Fore she just went berserk


    His face grew and wrinkled fast
    His mother couldnít let this last
    So she grabbed a huge pin
    And shoved it in his chin
    Thatís when it let out a vast blast




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    ||| Comments |||
      Great job with this Kyle
    You gave me a much needed laugh
    I havent ever really tried to write a limerick and I have to admit you have just inspired me to do so
    I look forward to reading more from you in the future
    You always seem to inspire me or make me feel better with your writes
    I consider you one very talented person
    God Bless
    Ron

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    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I find this quite commical, really. Pat is quite the man, eh? I think this is really a good poem. It sounds good when you put the two limericks together and make one poem. I'm not going to put this down at all, because i couldnt have done a better job myself.

    So what grade did you get on this?

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]


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