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    dots Submission Name: The Keydots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Gothic
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    dotsThe Keydots
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    Sitting in the dark
    Raging thoughts of pain, hurt and revenge flow
    Rushing fast enough to break an open human soul

    Keys dangle all around
    Keys for doors
    Keys for problems
    Keys for miscellaneous objects
    Only one of these keys however will open my lock
    The lock to my soul
    Unlocking my soul for the world to peer in
    Examining all that troubles an pleases me
    But this lock is closed

    Strong and thick
    Blades cannot get through
    And the intricacy of it is far too great to be picked
    Only the key will open it

    As I sit here in the dark
    Pain surging
    Tears flowing
    Soul and body bleeding

    I smirk
    For the key that belongs to me
    Is not dangling among the others
    It is falling
    Falling into a pit of eternal darkness and suffering
    It will not be retrieved any time soon





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