Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Keydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Gothic
    Total Views: 797
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1002



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Keydots
    -------------------------------------------




    Sitting in the dark
    Raging thoughts of pain, hurt and revenge flow
    Rushing fast enough to break an open human soul

    Keys dangle all around
    Keys for doors
    Keys for problems
    Keys for miscellaneous objects
    Only one of these keys however will open my lock
    The lock to my soul
    Unlocking my soul for the world to peer in
    Examining all that troubles an pleases me
    But this lock is closed

    Strong and thick
    Blades cannot get through
    And the intricacy of it is far too great to be picked
    Only the key will open it

    As I sit here in the dark
    Pain surging
    Tears flowing
    Soul and body bleeding

    I smirk
    For the key that belongs to me
    Is not dangling among the others
    It is falling
    Falling into a pit of eternal darkness and suffering
    It will not be retrieved any time soon





    Submitted on 2007-05-01 18:31:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    141749

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Linger written by saartha
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Push written by JanePlane
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Giving written by jjd
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry