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    dots Submission Name: A Roomdots
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    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA Roomdots
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    Mere joy.
    That is the affection of a curtain’s evening.
    The dust lingers,
    Refuses to be urged to float
    And to slowly vanish among the anonymous airy levels,
    Or random wooden surfaces.
    There are photographs,
    Immobilised by golden frames.
    These too have their share of dust,
    Especially the ones
    That immortalise departed smiles.
    Chandelier centrefold
    With mature crystal groups,
    Recollecting memories
    Of past tremulous experiences.
    Once wind, now dust.
    And, Ivory.
    Shapes of ivory that haunt the eye,
    Spears,
    Miniature people,
    Bare women,
    Spears.
    Few marble blocks away
    From
    The great ivory bone.
    Behind the burgundy furniture,
    It lies alone in its nudity,
    With the alien carved dedication
    Upon its violated smoothness.
    Alone,
    Yet occasionally patted by
    The curtain’s tender ends,
    Sometimes,
    Like a tree’s ends
    Or a breeze’s ends,
    On a delicate day in Africa.
    Before the ghostly memory of separation.
    The deficient grandeur.
    Once elephant, now dust.
    Mere dust.




    Submitted on 2007-05-01 19:31:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this, there is one thing that im having trouble with.
    "It lies alone in its nudity"
    Personal opinion, i think it should be nakedness, or something to that extent.
    Well that is the only thing that caught my eye, as i read through it.
    Well, this is great,
    Peace.

    | Posted on 2007-05-01 00:00:00 | by WonderfulComa | [ Reply to This ]


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