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    dots Submission Name: Marionettedots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 831
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    dotsMarionettedots
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    The monster forces me
    onto his king size bed,
    while coldly telling me
    Iím his special little guy.
    As he ties me up meticulously,
    so tight and so aggressively,
    he inserts a leather ball gag
    into my mouth and throat
    so my whimpers and screams
    could be completely reduced
    to small gust of fragile winds
    trap inside a chained melody.
    I can feel the looped rope
    digging into flesh and bones
    and without a breath or a sound
    I become his latest marionette
    with all strings attached.
    Trapped as his prisoner
    with nowhere to run,
    the agonizing moment
    has left me, melancholy
    as I can feel my heart
    shard of misery arms,
    Revealing my last hope
    of escaping is but
    an illusion in conflict
    with the reality
    of my youthful mind










    Submitted on 2007-05-01 21:41:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I learned a new word today, Marionette. This poem deals with a dark subject matter which might make some people feel a little uncomfortable. It has great descriptive qualities and is overall well written.
    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by Quelly | [ Reply to This ]
      wtf!

    cant seem to explain it any way!

    its message is dark, seems some sort of a crude thought !

    why would you post something like this?

    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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